Need a writing critique?

I’m a teen writer and I just wrote this story for a contest but I just found out I missed the deadline. Now I don’t think this is a very good story but I’d like to see your opinions on this.
“Captured from the Salazin Highlands, ladies and gentlemen I bring you a young and [...]

English Assignment: Writing a short story about nature?

Well for 8th Grade English, we went to look at an art piece called ‘Unbearable Lightness’ and its a concrete block with a twig leading up the top, with a tiny bird sitting at the tip. It’s displaying the controversy between the natural world and the industrial world (Bird = natural, concrete = industrial) And [...]

I am writing a book. Do you like the 1st chapter?

Chapter 1
Virgina and Sarah Roldex
I am Virgina Roldex. And this is my story. I live in Hollywood California! Some people think that where I live is so cool cause its where all the celebs are. To tell you the truth, they don’t talk to you and you don’t see them walking down the street like [...]