Is this a good start for a story?? Easy ten points, just tell me what you think!?

I have to turn in a short story to a writer. Is this a good piece? Please, any critism is greatly appreciated. The twigs snapped against my heels. The wind howled and Janie turned against it, in defeat. “I wanna go home.” Her lips turned in a quivering scowl, but her words blew away with [...]

What do you think of this poem written in Robert Frost’s style.?

I once played in halcyon fields where the purple heather grew, where the roe and hare were common, where serephic birds flew. I remember the sunshine on my face and gentle zephyrs wandered, long I laid on emerald grass, my childish dreams I pondered. O, I long for yesteryears when I ran so bright and [...]

Do you like this book?

I’m a 12 year old writer… here is a piece of a book I’m writing… what do you think? What can I change? It’s the beginning only… forgive any spelling mistakes. Chapter 1 “The opposite of war isn’t peace, it’s creation.” I To my nightmares I must recurr, Behind the curtain I musn’t look, Beyond [...]

Snake found on my patio is this normal?

I live in a concrete jungle.. a town house, my back yard is all patio with brick planter boxes its about 15×20 all blocked walls..My indoor cats loves to look out the sliding window at birds. One day a cat was all fixated on something right below the screen door. I looked to see what [...]

What do you think of this rap?

Yo check yo yo, check the script Me and the gods get it ripped Blunts in the dip, forty dogs in my lip Had a box, ‘Boom Boom’ the bass will blast We was laughing, at all the girls that passed Conversation, brothers had begin to discuss (Hey yo, Ra, remember that kid ya bust?) [...]

Do you like this poem of mine?

The darkness is agonizing. The silence is demeaning. And I feel vultures eyes. Looking at me leering. The gasps and moans of the wind, Is the only thing I’m hearing. My footsteps grow quicker now, Walking along the concrete paths. Yet I still feel something following me. Watching me with anger. Glancing with envy. And [...]

Is this short story structurally sound?

Life has only just begun, white lace and promises. So many roads to choose, he started out walking and than learned to run. When the evening comes, he smiles, so much of life to live. Joseph Driscle is a protected child, his mother Kathy loves him dearly and will do anything to keep him out [...]

My daughter got an E for this?

Home is a strange place. A place where one can hide, lock away troubles into an empty casket of long forgotten cobbles. These walls injest all my secrets, they throw back evrything I throw at them, but with twice the force. The power overcomes me at times and the feelings dispursed into the vacum starvs [...]

My daughter wrote this?

Home is a strange place. A place where one can hide, lock away troubles into an empty casket of long forgotten cobbles. These walls injest all my secrets, they throw back evrything I throw at them, but with twice the force. The power overcomes me at times and the feelings dispursed into the vacum starvs [...]

What kind of spider makes this web, and how do I remove it?

We live in the mountains on the US east coast. We have a large hole about 12 feet up the inside wall in our not-quite-finished-but-still-occupied indoor aviary. (Yup….indoor…..as in INSIDE my HOUSE.) About 3 days ago we noticed a large, thick, cotton-like spider web disappearing into this hole. The hole goes down into the wall, [...]

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