Is this a good start for a story?? Easy ten points, just tell me what you think!?

I have to turn in a short story to a writer. Is this a good piece? Please, any critism is greatly appreciated. The twigs snapped against my heels. The wind howled and Janie turned against it, in defeat. “I wanna go home.” Her lips turned in a quivering scowl, but her words blew away with [...]

What do you think of my story so far? Any names for it?

If you were to travel to a mystical garden filled with forgot dreams and hopes, you would find where everything I once loved is. Here, throughout the lush, fresh green grass and the fragrant tulips and roses, lay a thousand broken memories, not gone, but forgotten. If you were to sit underneath the soft leaves [...]

What do you think of this poem written in Robert Frost’s style.?

I once played in halcyon fields where the purple heather grew, where the roe and hare were common, where serephic birds flew. I remember the sunshine on my face and gentle zephyrs wandered, long I laid on emerald grass, my childish dreams I pondered. O, I long for yesteryears when I ran so bright and [...]

Tell me what you think of the Preface for my story!?

I was prowling the dark streets of Compton, CA when I first spotted him. He was standing with his back to me, his head tilted to the sky.. what was he looking at? I looked up at the exact moment an earsplitting caw ripped through the quiet darkness. There, flying above, we’re a dozen huge [...]

What do you think of my boring story i just wrote ?

Not sure what time it was ,when he got up . But when he got up ,there was no going back to sleep for him. Being alone never a easy thing to do , the thoughts run through his mind can never be gone till you go to sleep again. By yourself , for me [...]

What do you think of this rap?

Yo check yo yo, check the script Me and the gods get it ripped Blunts in the dip, forty dogs in my lip Had a box, ‘Boom Boom’ the bass will blast We was laughing, at all the girls that passed Conversation, brothers had begin to discuss (Hey yo, Ra, remember that kid ya bust?) [...]

do you think these facts are strange?

50 THINGS EVERYONE SHOULD KNOW (or 50 Completely Useless Facts!) The word “queue” is the only word in the English language that is still pronounced the same way when the last four letters are removed. Beetles taste like apples, wasps like pine nuts, and worms like fried bacon. Of all the words in the English [...]

What do you think about my narrative writing!!!!!!! rate/comment 1-10 scale?

Revoking that horrifying day. It all started on June MMVI. An ordinary day listening to music. Mother and father were preparing breakfast the traditional Mexican molletes bread topping with cheese, fried beans, dice tomatoes,onions, and butter. While they were preparing the food father suggested go horse around with some friends. Mother said no because the [...]

what do you think of my narrative writing?

Revoking that horrifying day. It all started on June MMVI. An ordinary day listening to music. Mother and father were preparing breakfast the traditional Mexican molletes bread topping with cheese, fried beans, dice tomatoes,onions, and butter. While they were preparing the food father suggested go horse around with some friends. Mother said no because the [...]

what do you think of the set list for my band’s first show tonight?

We are a cover band named Self Destructive Behavior we are a Metal band but we play other stuff too here’s the set tonight feel free to share your opinions on it. 1.”Primal Concrete Sledge” (Pantera cover) 2. “Master Of Puppets” (Metallica cover) 3. “Epic” (Faith No More cover) 4. “Lounge Act” (Nirvana cover) 5. [...]

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