Is this a good start for a story?? Easy ten points, just tell me what you think!?

I have to turn in a short story to a writer. Is this a good piece? Please, any critism is greatly appreciated. The twigs snapped against my heels. The wind howled and Janie turned against it, in defeat. “I wanna go home.” Her lips turned in a quivering scowl, but her words blew away with [...]

What do you think of my story so far? Any names for it?

If you were to travel to a mystical garden filled with forgot dreams and hopes, you would find where everything I once loved is. Here, throughout the lush, fresh green grass and the fragrant tulips and roses, lay a thousand broken memories, not gone, but forgotten. If you were to sit underneath the soft leaves [...]

Tell me what you think of the Preface for my story!?

I was prowling the dark streets of Compton, CA when I first spotted him. He was standing with his back to me, his head tilted to the sky.. what was he looking at? I looked up at the exact moment an earsplitting caw ripped through the quiet darkness. There, flying above, we’re a dozen huge [...]

What do you think of my boring story i just wrote ?

Not sure what time it was ,when he got up . But when he got up ,there was no going back to sleep for him. Being alone never a easy thing to do , the thoughts run through his mind can never be gone till you go to sleep again. By yourself , for me [...]

Is this short story structurally sound?

Life has only just begun, white lace and promises. So many roads to choose, he started out walking and than learned to run. When the evening comes, he smiles, so much of life to live. Joseph Driscle is a protected child, his mother Kathy loves him dearly and will do anything to keep him out [...]

Any plot ideas? I am attempting to write a short story, and I am stuck.?

I beamed as Curt and I walked through Central Park on that beautiful Sunday afternoon, families parked on the grass, the sun rays beaming down through the leaves onto my unnaturally pale skin, the song birds serenading us with their always joyful tunes, but little did I know, this would be the last day, I [...]

Do you think my story is good?

I wrote this story for a school project. It is the story of a dog. I am 13 years old right now but I was 12 when I wrote it. Please, if you have hateful comments, keep them to yourself. The name of this story is “Confined” I believe anyone can say that they would [...]

is this a good start for a short story?

please give feedback, and please be merciless…if it sucks, tell me so i can fix i – i can take it. (The War came suddenly, and ended with complete devastation. The fires ripped across the face of the earth with no regard for what they ravaged. Nations fell, one after the other, until none were [...]

Is this a good story??? based on mytholgy?

It was a dark night when ember was watching her favorite TV show. All the sudden the lights go off and she heres a humming song as bright as a bird. The lights slowly blink back on Ember mutters im okay. Ember is 15. She was adopted ,her parents left her with a note that [...]

Story ideas…. thoughts….?

So I was brainstorming and was just wondering about some story ideas and if they are interesting or not. Really I only have one big one right now here goes: P.S. You may need to have some knowledge of the setting the book takes place in to understand the feel better. The setting is around [...]

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