Can I please have some criticism on an excerpt from my novella?

So I’d really appreciate some constructive criticisms on this excerpt. Here goes: December 2nd was a too beautiful day for anyone to die. The sun was shining and birds chirped along the empty road. I could remember it as if it were yesterday, only it was actually about a week ago. I was walking along [...]

From Non-being to Being

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What do you think about this exerpt from this short novel i wrote called heartbreak?

Sitting in a room, faced down suffocating from the darkness that lingers inside, viciously taunting my misery. i contemplate hoping that one day light will show its glowing face again. shivering from the coldness of being betrayed by the one i gave my heart to. The one who was suppose to be the my one [...]

Bird Bath Seen From Top of Building

Image taken on 2007-04-07 13:35:53 by Jacob Moyer.

Mosaic depicting birds around a bird bath recovered from Capua Roman 1st century BCE – 1st century CE

Image taken on 2007-10-16 01:17:45 by mharrsch.

Stress and Anxiety Relief from Animal Doctors

A day’s work ends not at “quitting time.” After a hard day’s work, one cannot just rush home and immediately sit back on the sofa with feet raised. After long hours of paper sorting, tedious analysis and hours more of report writing, the average worker cannot simply relax knowing that there are are still more [...]

2277 From Below The Blue Glass Bird Bath

Image taken on 2010-08-22 11:32:59 by bsabarnowl.

Poultry House Plans: Best Protection from Hazardous Elements

A good poultry house can protect the chickens from hazardous elements such as the weather, predators, and injury. Here’s how to do it: Protection from Weather A dry, draft-free house is needed in poultry. This can be done by building a relatively draft-free poultry house with windows and doors which can be opened for ventilation [...]

How would you arrange these from abstract to concrete, 1 being abstract to 4 being concrete.?

OMG I am very confused with Abstract and COncrete. First question: -It was storming outside -the rain poured on the yard -i could hear the thunder -the weather was bad Second Question: -The birds sang all day -they were doing yard work -the lawnmower drowned their voices -the workers were outside making a fuss Thank [...]

How many times can a bird fall from its nest and live?

There is a bird’s nest in the top corner of our metal car covering. There are babies in the nest, already hatched, but one has fallen out. I used a piece of cardboard to shimmy the baby back into the nest so that I wouldn’t touch it, but the next day it was out again. [...]

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